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master of my heart by ~SaloHcin:iconSaloHcin:



I am a puppet you are my master
your contol strings wrapped around my heart
i sit on the shelf looking at you with my dead eyes
you use to play with me but now i just collect dust
do you still care for me?
or am i just your toy?
that you never play with any more
i just stay and hope you will
one day remember the fun you had
the way i made you happy
the way it made me happy
i felt your love
i have become cold
without your touch
if you no longer care please cut these strings
let me free
i will slowly die here
each day i die a little more...
©2004-2009 ~SaloHcin
:iconsalohcin:

Author's Comments

ahhh i person gave me the idea...
or if you will...

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:iconbarnicals:
Very nice contrast man, between yourself and the puppet. I like the style in this man, good work.

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Into poetry? ~poetzhaven
Into NZ? *Aotearoa
Into MORE poetry? ~reversify
What about me? ~Barnicals
:iconmr-atrus:
Very good. My favorite lines are:

i just stay and hope you will
one day remember the fun you had
the way i made you happy
the way it made me happy

Only complaint is that when you say I, you must use a capital I not the little bitty i. Besides that the spelling is great.

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I can't be home tonight
I will be back, it's alright
No one could ever love me
Half as good as you - "When Angel's Fly Away" Cold

Mr-Atrus' Poetic Ga
:iconblindrage19:
nice job. Its got alot of potential to be longer and more emotional in that aspect.
:icontheargonauts:
Ya know its nich Nick to know your not affraid of letting us know about your feelings. I'm not taking the piss (well not much anyways) because for someone like me I keep everything inside
:icongilll:
I see! My recent pic gave you a bit of inspiration! ;-9
Great job on this one. Realy. My feelings have been connected with it while I was reading...
Now I get the point of your comment! "Thanks..you'll see..." hehe sweet.
Long time no see, eh? :)

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:skullbones:
:iconladydragontl:
Please please set him free, before I cry! Very good I love it! :)

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Huked on fonics wurkd fur me! (Yes I know my spelling is bad):wtf:
Ladydragon - Trisa Lee
:iconsalohcin:
thanks mate your comments are always helpful...

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Join Me In The Darkness
We Have Pie!
:iconsalohcin:
yeah im such a puppet...

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Join Me In The Darkness
We Have Pie!
:iconsalohcin:
yeah it was one of my sperr of the moment ones...

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Join Me In The Darkness
We Have Pie!

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